Adding detail

I am learning to add some details to my writing.

Jill the Whale

Early in the morning Jill searched for some friends. She searched for days and days. Finally she saw tiny little seahorses.

She  said, “Can I be your friend?” They said, “Yes! You can.”

“My name is Jill. What are your names?” asked Jill. “Our names are Irene, Hannah and Jill.”

They lived happily ever after. The end.

I like adding detail to my stories. I know I am good at it because I can write long stories and Mrs Mason says they are funny!